In this article, a Grandmother talks about how her ordinary 14-year-old granddaughter , got shot. She was shot by another 14-year-old while waiting for her parents to pick her up from school.
http://www.cincinnati.com/story/opinion/columnists/krista-ramsey/2014/04/05/krista-ramsey-tyann-adkins/7373013/
Best written line: "Long, who lives in Avondale, knows that many factors played into her eldest grandchild's death: an adolescent with a criminal record and a gun; the whereabouts of the apartment's owner; and her granddaughter in an apartment complex about which her family had concerns."
In this line in the article, Krista Ramsy uses a very interesting sentence syntax. Instead of just using the usual sentence structure of a subject and predicate, she uses a colon and then begins to list of reasons that might've lead to Tyann's death. I think this sentence syntax fits will with this certain sentence, because it makes it easier for the author to write a list without using run-on or long and involved sentences. This sentence syntax also makes it easier for the reader to analyze the information the author is providing. I also noticed that the formal diction used in this sentence evokes a more serious tone. This makes the reader fully understand that the event the author is writing about , is indeed, serious, therefore allowing the reader to look at the situation through the author's serious point of view.
Krista Ramsey has a very relaxed and elaborate writing style. This means that she fully describes certain events, characters, or scenarios, making it relate-able to the reader. She also does not write in a too-formal or robotic manner, but more of a casual, relaxed manner. An example of her writing style from "Ramsey: For better vision, kids need time outdoors", is "The kid who used to walk home from school looking at houses and trees now rides home staring at a screen not much bigger than his hand. The teenager who used to research at the library or hang out with friends outdoors now does her studying and socializing in front if a computer in her bedroom." An example to show Ramsey's writing style from "Ramsey: Super Bowl QBs score points for great style" is,"At work,"Casual Fridays" have morphed into sundresses and golf shirts everyday. And almost no one dresses up any more for things that were once considered something of an event- dinner at a nice restaurant, religious services, plane flights." Finally, an example of Ramsey's writing style from "Grandmother says slain girl just an ordinary teen" is,"Had you met Tyann Adkins on the morning of March 30, you'd say she was like any other 14-year-old girl, her grandmother, Leatress Long, says. Hooked on Facebook. Hated getting up for school. Adored her 1-year-old brother and 10-year-old twin sisters and fussed at them constantly. Helped herself to her grandmother's leftovers whenever she visited. Was rarely seen without a string of fake pearls. Knew how to wheedle rides home and other favors from a large extended family who doted on her. And had discovered the pleasure of doing her hair and getting her nails done." All three of these quotes are examples of Ramsey describing someone or a scenario very thoroughly, allowing the reader to picture this actual person or scenario. These quotes also present Ramsey writing in a very casual way. This shows that Ramsey, indeed, has a very relaxed and descriptive writing style.
Three Questions I Would Ask Krista Ramsey:
-How did you develop your writing style?
-Why did you choose to write about these three articles?
-What was your style writing like before your education experience?
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